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the bottom right hand corner is kinda empty, you might move the features list down a bit, untilt slightly? That would free up some "elbow room" where you could put the where and when stuff :D

Never make the 'Where' and 'When' mixed up with something else... some poor person might google directions for a place in Australia instead of the USA (as an example... my mom mistyped that word... give her a break hehe)

Personally I think it looks pretty good :wink:

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see, i disagree. keep the spacing.

with the text, how about a really subtle crimpled paper effect?

also, the pink text in the top right has to go, change the colour, it's messing with the pallette. i like where it's spaced, but try making the text at least a similar colour to the BG so it looks nicer. hey, thats my opinion, but i think itd work better.

 

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see, i disagree. keep the spacing.

with the text, how about a really subtle crimpled paper effect?

also, the pink text in the top right has to go, change the colour, it's messing with the pallette. i like where it's spaced, but try making the text at least a similar colour to the BG so it looks nicer. hey, thats my opinion, but i think itd work better.

 

You should get the Win7 theme for XP. Then get the rest of Win7. Then uninstall XP. Then it'll really look nice. ~ David Atwell

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see, i disagree. keep the spacing.

with the text, how about a really subtle crimpled paper effect?

also, the pink text in the top right has to go, change the colour, it's messing with the pallette. i like where it's spaced, but try making the text at least a similar colour to the BG so it looks nicer. hey, thats my opinion, but i think itd work better.

 

You should get the Win7 theme for XP. Then get the rest of Win7. Then uninstall XP. Then it'll really look nice. ~ David Atwell

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see, i disagree. keep the spacing.

with the text, how about a really subtle crimpled paper effect?

also, the pink text in the top right has to go, change the colour, it's messing with the pallette. i like where it's spaced, but try making the text at least a similar colour to the BG so it looks nicer. hey, thats my opinion, but i think itd work better.

 

You should get the Win7 theme for XP. Then get the rest of Win7. Then uninstall XP. Then it'll really look nice. ~ David Atwell

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I like it. The background is good and it's nice and bold. I like the angled letters. Nice chosen fonts. It's perfect, actually. :D

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EDIT: Nevermind. Just someone post another pic.

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Flip: It looks pretty cool, has nice colors and everything. It's really clean and sharp and overall just looks nice. Good job.

Muse: There's too much contrast on the guy, and try adding some fx over him. also the noise in the background looks kind of wierd. The text and the border is nice though.

Since no one has posted here in forever, I'll post a new pic.

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The stars are great. The planet has a good texture, but the lighting is messed up. Why would the big one have two sides of light?

The small planet should also be in front of the big one.

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The stars and galaxies need some color, If you like the background to B&W then then it's just fine, as flip said the two sides of light on the big planet make it look small, try to distort some more the space dust or the nebula thing cause the stretched dents effect is shown clearly, BTW nice image and I saw the tutorial of doing the space texture, it is very good :)

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The stars are great. The planet has a good texture, but the lighting is messed up. Why would the big one have two sides of light?

The small planet should also be in front of the big one.

Why should the small planet be in front of the big one? and there are two light sources, but I'm not good enough at suns/etc. to add them in yet.

Thanks for C&C flip/yellowman.

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The small one should be in front of the big one mainly to give the picture some depth. Also it is so small it can be hard to see. I know where you are coming from as far as the lighting is concerned. I watched a video tut(link below) where there was just this kind of lighting effect used. Also if you watch it it will show you more effectively why the small moon should be in front. :wink:

http://victoriawebschool.ca/screencasts ... t-tutorial

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The small one should be in front of the big one mainly to give the picture some depth. Also it is so small it can be hard to see. I know where you are coming from as far as the lighting is concerned. I watched a video tut(link below) where there was just this kind of lighting effect used. Also if you watch it it will show you more effectively why the small moon should be in front. :wink:

http://victoriawebschool.ca/screencasts ... t-tutorial

Enjoy! :D

the video isn't working for me :?

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Pretty cool wallpaper, I like the style and the effects you used - well done overall.

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Jyro - very cool sig. It conveys a lot of emotion - I feel like the man with the mask is being hunted down - stalked -

Nice use of colors and effects to portray a feeling. Excellent piece of work overall.

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guys. RULES! its happening again, everyone is just trumping other's work. be patient, and if you want to post an image, wait your turn. maybe even critque someone elses, dont just "well nobody has posted in ages TRUMPED!" seriously, its annoying me. im sure david didnt want this to happen to this thread, and it almost happened before.

Guys. please. follow the rules. so, i think we should just start anew, with nexleffel's wallpaper, that has 2 ratings to go.

 

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i think we should just start anew, with nexleffel's wallpaper, that has 2 ratings to go.

Why, Jerkfight hasn't received three critiques yet :wink:

@ Jerkfight - I agree with 007 Nab, there is a lot of emotion conveyed through the sig and the colors used really make that emotion shine through. This tried and tested sig style is mabye wearing a little thin but it still works, and your sig has probably enough orginality in it to make look unique. Great work, I like it :)

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So whose are we critiquing? If no one's, can I post my own, or start anew with mine?

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If Jerkfight hasn't hit his 3 by midnight tonight (EST), you can post a new one.

 

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jerkfight, I like your use of colors in the picture. Green to some extent symbolizes nature, and it seems that there is green there, but it is being overshadowed by the yellow, which to me conveys a warning of danger, to life. Which is also seems to be overtly shown with the mask. That with a blackbackground really grabs the attention. I agree it arouses emotions, I would say the strongest of which is angst.

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Picture one is pretty cool. It has great texture and movement. It is however, maybe to centred. Try to spread your wings more and think outside the box. Try to also work on the colours a bit. Rather than just black and red I can also picture it with some greys and white.

It also looks like it isn't actually on the wall, just infront. Try feathering (true feather) this untill it looks right.

Some of the sides are also to smooth and long. Try to make it spreading more instead of splattering a set shape.

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