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I'll give it a shot.

A young boy every day, had a routine of waking up at 6.45 got ready for school and left the house and arrived at school at 7.30, he wasn't like other kids. He seemed to have OCD from a very young age and scrubbed and scrubbed himself every day and night. At school he was in paranoia about dirt from the field and sweat from other kids as they brushed past him. He began to get frustrated with things also, he couldn't read as well as other kids. His mother began to get more and more frustrated with him. She wanted him to be normal and one morning the Teachers were surprised to not see the young boy at 7.30, infact they didn't see the boy that day at all. The teachers were worried and one of them went round there to see where he was today. Nobody answered the door so she peered through the letter box. She could see the post on the floor, and on the corner was a red stain. She then looked up further and saw a liquid she couldn't make out the colour. She held her hand to her mouth ran to the phonebox and called 999, "Please come to 27 wetherby street, I looked into the letter box and there was a pool of blood coming out of a room, there was a child and a mother living there and the boy didn't come to school today either" she said panicly. They replied "Try to calm down they are on their way". The police and ambulance arrived and broke into the house. They went into the room the blood was coming from were the little boy was laying his wrists covered in blood and the mother not to be seen. They searched the house and in the Mothers room she was hanging from a rope white as a cloud. Postmortems were carried out, And it seemed as if the boy had cut his wrists only slightly and kept brushing away at them untill reaching his veins. The time of death from his mother and son was 3 hours after the boy had died. We believe she felt it was her own fault and couldn't take it.

This was written by me!

Not amazingly sad but I'm good at writing this kind of stuff.

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Pretty good idea. However, your grammar, mechanics, flow and dramatic effect could use some work. Refinish that piece, and it could be a lot sadder (word?), and a very good block of prose as well.

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I'll give it a shot.

A young boy every day...

Rewrite it, make it more laconic and with more of a shock at the end.

As for the post above, take it as an invitation to enjoy what you have.

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There's something wrong about this thread...

Yeah. Why do we try to get sad?

Maybe if we are sad sometimes, is it easier to be happy later because of biochemical reactions in the human body?

It's strange anyways^^

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Don't, I like it, wether it's just to show of or comfort someone who lost. Remember: strange isn't bad, if it was this world would suck.

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Um, for your safety, please don't open unless your really tempted.

You might want to cover your ears...

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I HATE THIS THREAD!

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It may be a crappy thread because it makes you sad, but it is true, it makes you thankful for the things you have in life.

Jake, you may think those pictures don't have any meaning to someone else, but they do to me. My ex-husband was recently deployed to Iraq and I'm terrified for my daughter, his new wife and son that he'll come home to us in a casket.

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